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that limp,
lamp-bitten sound
left warbling on my desk
where the glass
went sick with longing -
how do we start over?
your note said it all
when you put down the pen
and I could feel the air
forget your name,
coals in the grate
hissing their warning
like a dirge.

i was born too late
you said,
and the robins bare mourning
on their breasts
so beautifully.
your feet always knew
the way home,
fighting their instincts,
with the purge
of simple lies
crushed under them
like the lost gift
of caring.
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angeljunkie Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011   Photographer
and I could feel the air
forget your name


I love that.
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chibivampire2122 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
This is just beautiful i adore every word :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2011  Professional Writer
That is very nice of you to say - thanks!
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athenaaqua Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i like it!
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pearl-dust Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010   Writer
Its like reaching into the chest and twisting out raw emotion...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2011  Professional Writer
Many thanks. I appreciate it very much.
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:iconnedholmes:
NedHolmes Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010   Writer
Your work has been featured here... [link]
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011  Professional Writer
Many thanks! I appreciate it.
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NedHolmes Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011   Writer
Always a pleasure, Brendan.
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vintage-muse Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010
I never like these dark moods of yours, especially if I feel you're brooding but I can never deny the genius of your words when they elucidate the emotion so well.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011  Professional Writer
And as you know all too well, this one has become endless.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010
oh my.... how eloquently sad...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011  Professional Writer
Many thanks. I appreciate it!
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2011
:heart:
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SZografos Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010
can't quite get 'lamp-bitten sound' out of my mind now, nor the glass 'sick with longing.'
you've caged pain in these images.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am not sure where that first one came from...it just seemed to sum it all up.
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AElfrics-Cat Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
"...I could feel the air
forget your name"

such a powerful image... so very sad.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks. I appreciate it.
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After-Eden Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
this is a lovely poem
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. Happy New Year to you!
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After-Eden Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Happy New Year to you too!!
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CrimzonRose Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2010   Writer
... :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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LaColombeDeDeuil Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2010  Professional General Artist
:rose::rose:

~~ This broke my heart as I read it, knowing such a loss, and tears marred the last few lines. You are so gifted.~~

always,
katti
a humble poet
:rose:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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caddman Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2010  Professional General Artist
...Excuse me if I do a quick view and :+fav: on run...been very busy as of late...Nice work ...:heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Remarkable as always!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Most welcome!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2010
So much emotion, so much hurt.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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RainySkyz Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010   Writer
:( Sad but totally love it! Never mind any complaints about punctuation if that's how you wish to express today. People may fight you in prose, but poetry is what poetry wishes to be, at any given moment, muse or no. I for one love all your styles. I may not understand everything you say, and admittedly some are brilliantly way over my very ungifted poet's head. Nevertheless I know beautiful poetry when I see it. And I see it here.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks! I have learned to pretty much ignore those remarks, but do feel compelled to set people straight on the "rules" of FV. Your words mean a lot to me.
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dj-renee Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010
Wonderfully expressed. Random question: what were you trying to express with proper grammar and no caps?
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Professional Writer
The punctuation (such as it is) is done in order to enhance flow. I have a number of poems without it, but I sometimes think it just makes the pieces too ambiguous. I know a lot of people say that line breaks can act in place of punctuation, but when your line breaks are odd...

The lack of capitalization is not something I do often. I usually employ in when I want to denote a sense of desolation, solitude and loss...or complete defiance and rebellion.
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dj-renee Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2010
The lack of capitalization works for that. Usually I see the lack without proper grammar, giving a sense of abstraction or childishness, so I was a little confused with the mix. You can catch the desolation through the lack of capitalization, but the grammar shows the person in full use of their faculties, which goes against the lack of capitalization. As for the line breaks, they were a bit odd, but they helped give the speaker that sense of disjointed confusion. You might want to see how altering punctuation can help your message and not hinder it. ^_^ But it's very well done. I love the use of imagery.
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lady-of-the-quill Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
painful delicacy for the heart to read this..
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Superb!...I love your poems dearest Brendan!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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bewilderedconfused Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent expression of emotions as always! :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you like it.
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athenaaqua Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I am a lapsed writer, and your words mezzmeereyes me. Maybe one day I find a/muse to rekindle the dead poet that weeps in my heart.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
I have found that if you just relax and let go, she returns more readily. Many thanks for your kind words.
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PoetsHand Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010
Wonderful!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I appreciate that.
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Penessence Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010
oh dear, are you and Victoria having troubles?

You don't have to answer that, I suspect you meant bear* not bare, but i can't be sure

Love the way the lines slot together seamlessly here
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Professional Writer
No, not at all! We are fine...it is just a random poem.

I meant bare as in "baring your breast"...

And thanks!
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Penessence Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2010
Oh yeah, I now am not sure why I was confused by that

Thats good then
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