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I caught you
walking out on wires again,
falling out my window
in a trick so beautiful
that your father wept
and your lover
held his breath.
You called it
an act of defiance
in that voice
that brings me to my knees
and begs me
to argue with you
when you know
that all I really want to do
is strip the pain
from your insides
and bed you
like war.
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Prompt - fly

For Victoria

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:iconpixiespoisonedpen:
"strip the pain from your insides and bed you like war"

Just amazing... my stomach somersaulted over this...

:heart:

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:iconvisualpoetress:
I agree with PixiesPoisonedPen that is a very powerful line :) great poem Brendan :)

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:iconerziban:
You are good! I grovel at the feet of the poetry god!!!
:aww:

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Dance through your day, sing out loud.......live life large.
:iconkiwi-damnation:
Wow. That is.. wow. Fantastic. I love it!

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:iconsora-seraph:
Oh, God -
How is it that a poem about flight makes me feel like falling? Falling out my window. Falling through the ground. Falling or maybe flailing, I don't know which. I can't see through this green screen of jealousy.

But if I do know one thing, it's this: your skill is ninja-esque. Mind-blowingly, jaw-droppingly, coffee-spittingly good. And other such hyphenated terms.

Don't stop, please? And maybe write a book? So I can buy it and scribble in the margins and smear watercolor rainbows across the pages and treasure it for all the history of forever?

Because that would kick some serious ass. :D

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:iconrenegade-angel23:
:worship: Wow!

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:iconponddreamer:
So elegant. The imagery and the flow of the piece melds into a seamless tapestry of vivid emotion. Wonderful, as always, Brendan. *smile*

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The other is to get it."

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:iconloveshoteyes:
Your work is just so passionate it takes my breath away.
xo

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:iconobskuritease:
Beautiful. The language feels crisp and dominating, but still flows gracefully.
Wonderful concept. I love the ending, it's such powerful phrasing.

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