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I feel the rhythm of his heart,
beneath the boards the beating starts;
as reason from my mind departs,
I fall apart, I fall apart.

The men who knocked upon my door,
not knowing what's beneath my floor
will want to settle up the score -
I do implore, I do implore

This guilt breaks conscience with my lie -
my wracking sobs and wretched sighs.
I never meant for him to die.
It was his eye, it was his eye!
December Form Challenge, 2012 :iconkiwi-damnation::iconprojectdfc:

The Monotetra
The monotetra is a modern form created by Michael Walker. It uses
monorhyme (each line has the same ending rhyme) and iambic
tetrameter. It features quatrains and its true uniqueness comes from the
last line of each stanza being a statement of 4 syllables repeated.

This one is loosely based on Poe's "The Tell Tale Heart"


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KurlyCrazyKat Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great! I really loved it!
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BloodMoonEquinox Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Fantastic poem! :clap: Poe would be proud!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I appreciate the support!
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GaYtAcOs Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i loved this! i could tell imidiately that this was based off of "The Tell Tale Heart". your last stanza almost made me feel bad for him. wonderful job!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I am glad you like it.
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KarateCat211 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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KarateCat211 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Np. It's very good!
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap::heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks. I appreciate it very much!
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kamisch42 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the echo in each last line :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I appreciate it!
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MrWootton Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
=D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate that.
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TheDorsai Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Way to take a form that promotes silly pieces and turn it serious/dark. Very well done.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks. Yeah...I had to do something light!!
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Shades-Of-Lethe Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love iambic tetrameter... Maybe because I love Emily Dickinson and - of course - Poe... This is brilliant, Brendan! Excellent work! As always of course! :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate that.
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Shadowed-Star18 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
Featured here [link] :D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate that.
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Shadowed-Star18 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
you're very welcome! i love your work :D
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ExterminatorHydrogen Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate that.
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timelessangel Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A perfect tribute to the Tell Tale Heart. You, my friend, captured the essence of the story.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate that.
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Jadesandwich Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice~ Love Poe.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate that.
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012   Writer
Brilliant :D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Your wonderful work has been showcased here: [link]
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks!
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dinysrawr Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It's beautiful! It sums up the story very well and would make Poe proud (:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student
Great poem, I love the rhythm.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Superb!:worship:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Sapient-Butterfly Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, as always :aww:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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zhenyue Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012
Very nice! Not only do you use the monotetra form very well, but you were able to succinctly capture the feel of the original story as well. The lines flow naturally and the repeated statements just seem to fit right in. Great job and keep up the good work!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Holophrasic Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012
Lovely poem. The emotion is great, and I love the rhyme scheme you used. I may try one of these myself. :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Sunnycat17 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Wow, I read The Tell Tale Heart because of my school last year! I must say I remember this very well!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Hope you enjoyed it!
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CinnamonRed Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012
Wow. Beautiful!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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StoneDragon1999 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student General Artist
Ahhh nothing better than a little Poe when you're morbidly sick
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Hope you enjoyed it!
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DiGi-H Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Artist
Nicely done. Big fan of Poe's works since I was young. :)
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