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The killing season
is upon us again -
our sons gone underground,
our trees become weapons
and the last bloom
of our youth
laid bare by carrion.
In town the men
all ask for cigarettes -
the nicotine on their breath
stalking new prey
as it mingles in the streets
and tries to look
indifferent.

The women wear handkerchiefs
like bandages
wrapping their heads;
and from the buildings
stream white flags
and sheets,
warning the children
there are vacancies
below the surface.
Our houses
do not recognize us -
we leave the doors open
while the windows look
disinterested
and the gardens starve.

But we shall collect wounds
this harvest -
roots trapped in soil,
dry husks in crates
and barrels by the score
to haul to market,
the slender barter
of our dreams
a final afterthought
treading on our tongues.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Oh gosh.... There's such a feeling of emptiness and desolation here. This is. Just. It really captures a feeling and moment. It's a striking piece of work.

I like:
"our trees become weapons" because of the juxtaposition, trees are such peaceful things.

"there are vacancies
below the surface." is a truly poignant line that says so much with so little.

"Our houses
do not recognize us" for the same reasons as above.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! I had the first line in my head for about half a year.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
it's a great line, and you fleshed it out perfectly.
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Ard0R0us Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This one is smooth and cool. Dark and artful while seemingly effortlessly conveyed. Very good.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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FracturedxPorcelain Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Photographer
Wow...that was beautiful. Amazing work.
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KnightsSorrow Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful imagery
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Student Writer
This is haunting. It rivals some of the poetry I've read from English writers in World War I.
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Celestial22 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
"our trees become weapons
and the last bloom
of our youth
laid bare by carrion."

Very chilling, the poem as a whole.

If you do publish, do post on DA to let us all know. Would love to have a book of your work.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
Love that the whole world blooms alive in your poetry.
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xxspoooonsxxx Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I loove it.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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violetense Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Student Writer
Unsettling and slightly dark. You have a way with words.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Professional Writer
*Smiles* I seem to dwell in unsettling and slightly dark these days. It may become my motto! Thanks.
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Ard0R0us Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You could adopt the street name 'Exlax'
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Student Writer
Beautiful imagery layered with disquieting descriptions, stunning work! My only question is "The women wear handkerchiefs/like bandages", what sort of imagery did you expect the readers to gain from that line?
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
White squares of cloth wrapped around their heads like bandages. Many thanks!
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Student Writer
Oh I understand now, I was picturing band-aids rather than gauze... rather disgusting imagery...
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Student Writer
Goodness! Halloween isn't for a few more months at least! :giggle:
I loved it and I quite enjoyed "but we shall collect wounds this harvest"

and "While the windows look disintegrated and the gardens starve"

Your poetry is a delicacy for the tongue. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
*Smiles* Maybe I should do a Xmas one next? Many thanks!
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Student Writer
Christmas in July does seem to be a trend. :giggle:
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ClaudiaCasanova Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
When I do visit D.A. I look at your poetry in my inbox first, and it's never a dissapointing visit.

Again, another beautiful piece. (please make a book and publish it!)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am halfway through self-publishing a book, but I put it on hold. I have started submitting a lot of work to online poetry sites and print magazines. Most have strict rules regarding work already in print.
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PixiesPoisonedPen Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
How delightfully bleak, my dear - quite masterful.

:heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very powerful...I was hooked with the first stanza. Amazing job. :star:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. :star:
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SorrowfulWinter Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
They should just label you the God of Poetry if they haven't already. You always write such strong pieces, it's like every word warps into an image. :worship: :faint:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Professional Writer
That is incredibly nice of you. Many thanks!
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SorrowfulWinter Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Just speaking the truth. ^^ You’re welcome!
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
Strong emotion here. Well written!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
You are very welcome :)
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Superb work my dearest!:heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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TeamHaitian Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ohh get it nice really nice
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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ChiefWord Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
So rad, baby. So rad.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
To make more space underground, we can always pile more ground on top of bodies to lift it higher. Someone is always willing to make an excuse to start it happening.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Unfortunately, that is all too correct!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
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Fristy-Chan Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
it's so beautiful its amezing:clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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fragile-masochist Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Student Artist
I just got back on here after a break. I just finished reading this and WoW...beautiful! Your words are delicious. I want to eat this poem =)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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timelessarii Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Student General Artist
When I saw this on my Watch I closed my eyes and said, "Yes...!" :D
Beautiful as always, though I especially liked the first stanza. I thought that "carrion" was a good word to use and it really popped for me.
I must say that I miss poetry month and how it forced you to write something new every day ^_^
Keep up the great work!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks. I should try and do something every day again...if my muse will cooperate!
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timelessarii Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student General Artist
I know what you mean :( some days I have too much inspiration and others too little.
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