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The killing season
is upon us again -
our sons gone underground,
our trees become weapons
and the last bloom
of our youth
laid bare by carrion.
In town the men
all ask for cigarettes -
the nicotine on their breath
stalking new prey
as it mingles in the streets
and tries to look
indifferent.

The women wear handkerchiefs
like bandages
wrapping their heads;
and from the buildings
stream white flags
and sheets,
warning the children
there are vacancies
below the surface.
Our houses
do not recognize us -
we leave the doors open
while the windows look
disinterested
and the gardens starve.

But we shall collect wounds
this harvest -
roots trapped in soil,
dry husks in crates
and barrels by the score
to haul to market,
the slender barter
of our dreams
a final afterthought
treading on our tongues.
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Oh gosh.... There's such a feeling of emptiness and desolation here. This is. Just. It really captures a feeling and moment. It's a striking piece of work.

I like:
"our trees become weapons" because of the juxtaposition, trees are such peaceful things.

"there are vacancies
below the surface." is a truly poignant line that says so much with so little.

"Our houses
do not recognize us" for the same reasons as above.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! I had the first line in my head for about half a year.
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:iconperidot-magelette:
peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
it's a great line, and you fleshed it out perfectly.
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Ard0R0us Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This one is smooth and cool. Dark and artful while seemingly effortlessly conveyed. Very good.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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FracturedxPorcelain Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Photographer
Wow...that was beautiful. Amazing work.
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KnightsSorrow Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful imagery
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Student Writer
This is haunting. It rivals some of the poetry I've read from English writers in World War I.
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Celestial22 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
"our trees become weapons
and the last bloom
of our youth
laid bare by carrion."

Very chilling, the poem as a whole.

If you do publish, do post on DA to let us all know. Would love to have a book of your work.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
Love that the whole world blooms alive in your poetry.
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