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I've wandered far too long tonight.
I'm left adrift, the coward's flight -
an outcast from society.
I close my eyes and dream of thee.

Stripped of my honor and my name;
accused by all, I bear the blame.
This blasted heath from which I flee -
I close my eyes and dream of thee.

The greatest prize for which I strived,
my fellow soldiers gave their lives.
Three white feathers given to me -
I close my eyes and dream of thee.

Branded guilty, without bail,
handcuffed in irons, cast in gaol-
no longer shall I wander free.
I close my eyes and dream of thee

And after sundown, cut me loose,
an offering to the hangman's noose.
If there's a God, he'll hear my plea -
I close my eyes and dream of thee
December Form Challenge, 2012 :iconkiwi-damnation::iconprojectdfc:

The Kyrielle is a French form written in quatrains. Each quatrain
contains a repeated line or phrase as a refrain. It has a meter usually
composed of eight syllables per line but it can be varied. There is no
limit to the number of stanzas, but three is generally the minimum.
The normal structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B. with B being the
repeated line.A varied structure could be a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B. etc.
or even a second line that did not rhyme at all. a/e/a/Z etc.

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SylviaVeir Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I am constantly awed by how well you master all these different styles! The writing is beautiful and so very sad.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I am glad you like it.
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Shades-Of-Lethe Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Brilliant work... Perfect!!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
I really enjoyed the rhyming forms in the challenge.
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conspir Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist
This is fantastic! :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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TheDorsai Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The final two stanzas were the strongest, with the final line of this poem hitting like a truck.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   General Artist
I love the feel of aristocracy and gentry I get throughout the piece :heart:
Stunning job, as always, dear sir! :clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks. I was going for a ballad type feeling.
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   General Artist
It surely does give off that feeling. :heart:
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012   General Artist
Wonderful poem! :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice rhythm. Nice story. Just saw Les Miserable tnt. A bit of deja vu
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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MittAnnexia13 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012   Traditional Artist
I really appreciate the fact that you explain all these different poem forms in the comments of your deviations, that inspires me to try some writing myself.:)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Magnificent!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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barbzzp Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
IT reminds me of the french revolution.. :) this is very nicely writ!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"I close my eyes and dream of thee..."

I love the repetitive line in this piece - like a soft, driving rhythm, or the pulse of a heartbeat. Very beautiful and moving. :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012   Writer
Very well written my friend :D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! And I am really getting into it this year!
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013   Writer
:)
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bewilderedconfused Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A great poem!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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bewilderedconfused Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! :iconmeawplz:
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CallMeBlackSmoke Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This reminds me some of Inman from Cold Mountain. A very romantic, heavy story.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It oddly reminds me of Kipling. Good job.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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aldwarke Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012
I meant to add - the verse form suits the poem so well.
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aldwarke Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012
Very good. It touches the soul because we know so much more now about the horrible conditions of warfare. The phrase 'Three white feathers' is like a keystone in the poem for me and speaks volumes about the attitudes to battle stress in the 1914-1918 war of those who didn't go to the trenches for one reason or another.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks. I was inspired by a song.
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aldwarke Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
As a man who sings in a band it would be interesting to know the song title. I am often similarly inspired and often come up with a song to suit the occasion sometimes with embarassing results showing what I am feeling but not saying out loud.
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Skullkid43 Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012
Magnificent!:clap:Its sophistcated,with a ting of yearning!!Well done!:D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Skullkid43 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Your welcome:D
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is brilliant!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Rambling-anthology Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That is awesome and kind of sad...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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SweediesArt Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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SweediesArt Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very welcome:heart:
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