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Strange how the swans did not return
to the lake that June,
almost as if they knew something
the rest of us did not -
some savage instinct or glorious flaw
christened and drowning in the water.

Their nests had been plucked clean, deflowered -
the eggs all gone,
the water choked thick and spiteful
with weeds.
The dock stood as always - knee deep in reeds
and apathy, the bald wood
showing its age and wobbling.

The tide brought its witness -
the wide, yellow maw of pollen
forbidding the surface to move.
You stood on the shore and poked
the sand with a stick as if expecting
it to to get up and walk away and surprised
when it did not make a sound.

I wondered what you were thinking
while you stared out over the water,
holding your breath like a bucket of stones.
Your lips never moved but I could hear
you talking -
blithe and unseen sounds nestling
in the crater of late afternoon.

And the kites kept their distance
all summer, never noticing the mercury
bursting from the thermometers or how
the wind kept changing its direction,
just biding their own time as the months
wore out their brief welcome.
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Shades-Of-Lethe Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Featured here: [link] :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks!
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AElfrics-Cat Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
At once beautifully natural and uncomfortably ominous. Delicious imagery in this. And, it's odd (well, so am I), but my favourite line in this is the description of the wooden dock. Yay, wood.
(Also, apologies for the onslaught of comments all at once - I am catching up on my dA summer!)
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Shades-Of-Lethe Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wonderful... you are such a great poet...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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flummo Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Student Writer
Oh goodness this is absolutely beautiful.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I greatly appreciate it!
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
The dichotomy between "savage instinct" and "glorious flaw" really appeals to me, as does the line "Your lips never moved but I could hear" all the way to the end of the poem. Fantastic!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I greatly appreciate it!
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VicariouSoul Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Writer
I like the fact you spend more than just a couple of hours on your work. You'll work on it for days or a week. I believe poems that are dished out very fast don't hold a quality to them like a poem that has been carefully looked over with new eyes and improved upon over and over until it's just right. One great poem makes up for ten rushed ones that fall short. There was a poet, I forget his name, that said if you don't write one poem a day then you're not a poet or a good poet. I have to disagree.

Anyway, your work impresses me yet again, as always, and pardon me for my hiatus. I haven't really been able to read much from anyone due to outside events.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I used to be able to just sit and write the whole thing in two to three minutes flat. Lately they come line by line. Both work...
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VicariouSoul Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Same here, but over time I found I would take more time on things when writing which has helped in that I don't have to go back so often to correct or make things sound better.

You're very welcome.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
"I like the fact you spend more than just a couple of hours on your work. You'll work on it for days or a week. I believe poems that are dished out very fast don't hold a quality to them like a poem that has been carefully looked over with new eyes and improved upon over and over until it's just right. One great poem makes up for ten rushed ones that fall short. There was a poet, I forget his name, that said if you don't write one poem a day then you're not a poet or a good poet. I have to disagree."

A kindred soul! :iconbravoplz:
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VicariouSoul Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Spoken like a straightforward man, damn right. That poet, whoever he was, should have shot himself in the foot for such words. It's nonsense at best.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
Many things in life are better when allowed proper time to mature, after all.
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VicariouSoul Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Writer
It's good to know there's someone out there other than myself that holds this to be true.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
It's funny, I was actually just explaining to someone the other day about how I purposefully let my poetry "sit" for a set period of time once completed. Then I return and slowly, carefully begin modifying and editing the poem before finally submitting it (and even once that's done, I always listen for critique). Personally, I make it a point to never inundate my watchers and to never post anything less than my best work.
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VicariouSoul Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Writer
I agree. To flood your Watchers with so many poems at once not only becomes an annoyance in their In-boxes, but when you submit so many at once it doesn't really make them anxious so as to want to read your next piece. When you take your time no matter how long it takes, it's a much better feeling for your Watchers when they do finally see a new piece of work from you. It's almost like when you're around someone too much be it your parents, friends, etc. then you go on a long trip and come back, they are much more happier to see you and appreciate you more than usual. The same applies to our Watchers.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
I couldn't agree more. One of my favorite parts about this site is logging on to find that a poet I admire deeply has composed a new piece! It's fulfilling in a way, I think, to watch someone grow as an artist and to see their work evolving over time in quality, technique, and thematic imagery. You just don't get that same sort of "gift unwrapping" feeling when each and every day the deviant has posted five new pieces. Personally, I'd much rather have it this way. :)

And thank you for the watch, good sir!
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PoetsHand Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012
I'm catching up on my reading of deviations. Very well done!!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
Lovely ending.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks. I guess I truly have lost all objectivity because I am not happy with the end.
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"holding your breath like a bucket of stones"

I don't think a single piece of yours I've ever read has failed to have that one line that kicks me (poetically speaking) in the gut.

forever a fan.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks for those kind words. A lot of my poems start as just some random line that ends up somewhere.
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Ferelwing Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Well written!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I greatly appreciate it!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
A fine example of you. Very pictorial, concrete and yet surreal in time and place, with an original way of looking at... substance. I think you're the best poet on dA.

With the possible exception of me, of course. :D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Your words are far too kind - thanks very much. Life is sort of surreal, at least when we do not expect it.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
I think they were exactly kind enough. :)
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Life seems most surreal when I most expect what's about to happen. :D
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PixiesPoisonedPen Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Lovely, as always, my dear. You actually transported me to the dockside with your words, I could feel the wind and smell the sea... excellent work.

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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. This one was personal.
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Hijinxd Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
Words bathed in imagery. Wonderful.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I really appreciate it!
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bluemysticart Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
:clap: Brillisnt as always, my friend! :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I really appreciate it!
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I somewhat fancy this kind of writing.
Lovely.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I really appreciate it!
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caddman Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Professional General Artist
...very nice thoughts...lovly words...:clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I really appreciate it!
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Temperate-Sage Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Professional General Artist
This is absolutely beautiful! It reminds me of the the writing of Mary Oliver, one of my favorite poets!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I really appreciate it!
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Life laid bare... an anology for many dying memories.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks. It is a personal one.
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this! The descriptions of the scummy pond is great, I could imagine it perfectly - very literal and simple, but with a nice philosophical ending.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I really appreciate it!
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bewilderedconfused Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant poem!!! :icongreatplz:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I really appreciate it!
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bewilderedconfused Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome! :iconmeowkittyplz:
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SugarHeartedGirl Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! It really reminds me of Mary Oliver (my favourite poet!)
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