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Seven more mouths to feed
(For this you left
your father's house?),
shoes piled by the door
and grimy rucksacks
full of coal.
(He promised you a diamond)
They keep you on your toes
with their uncombed hair
and their untrimmed beards
and appetites like young bulls.
That dress of yours
has seen better days
and your hands
are worn out -
bloodied starlings in your pockets.
So you cook and clean
and sew
and wait by the window
each morning for them to leave,
polishing your apples
and dream of what the huntsman

is hiding in his box.
The REAL story...
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STelari Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Very well written indeed.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Fragul Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014
Awesome! I love this. 
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it - thanks!
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This lovely image just floored me. :)

"bloodied starlings in your pockets."
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!  I want to do more in this series.
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You should.  You have quite the handle on applying creepy and lurid in good measure- dark theater.  :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! In looking at what I have written over the years, there is little that is not dark.
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've been trying to figure that one out (in my own writing).  Happier, hopeful stuff doesn't come as naturally.  I keep a happy/hopeful folder in my gallery, but it doesn't get a lot of entries.  :)
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect :heart:
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PondDreamer Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sublimely ironic. The last line just tied it together so fittingly I caught myself grinning ;)
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AElfrics-Cat Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, beautiful last line! :boing:

Wonderful! :aww: x
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Nysa-Nightsong Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Student Writer
Gotta love reality bursting romantic fantasy bubbles...
This has a darkly smug tone that just reeks of "I told you so."
Can almost see the evil stepmom rubbing her hands in twisted glee and emitting a demented gloating laugh.
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Between-Borderlines Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
Oh most wionderful! How I've missed this... I am Snow White every year for Halloween... she is my princess within.
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Drusila333 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
Beautiful work! Your take on a more realistic view is vivid! :blackrose:
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izzabelable Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like your take on this
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Seraphine-Harmonium Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013   Artisan Crafter
Unfortunately, this is probably true....
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paz0ok Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Impressive! I wished I would be capable to do something like this!
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this, it is indeed quite a realistic interpretation
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Student General Artist
This is glorious. <3
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013   Writer
Your work has been showcased here: [link]
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013   Writer
Love it :D
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Student Writer
This reminds me SO much of how I used to write. Haha, wow. Brings back memories. (I mean this in a good way.)
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really dig your interpretation, Brendan. This is aces.
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Lierymell Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love!
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Audience-0f-One Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! This is amazing! You my friend are the bomb! Love it!
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Cinnamoncandy Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You have been featured. [link] :heart:
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mseal Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Wow...a very different perspective...more reality than fairy tale :)
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ShanubisChronos Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sad but beautiful poem. (TT^TT)
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Indigohan Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
That's beautiful. I loved the last few lines especially
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derpwolf21 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
\" the real story" :) True
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CreativeSawsan Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Simply beautiful..
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Superbly beautiful my dearest!
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MikeHenry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Another charmed piece from you, and i've got a friend who is into all things Snow White that I'm sharing this with (bragging about you, of course) :)
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GuardianLadySkye Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
I had a clear image in my mind the entire time I was reading. Wonderful work, very well written!
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maybe-paper-hearts Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Photographer
cool concept to make form the original story some kind of 'feminist rage'.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
An excellent twist on the tale!
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KuraKisa Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I do believe I felt a light fluttering when I discovered a new piece written by yourself. It's always lovely to experience catharsis with a literary body.
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Skullkid43 Featured By Owner May 29, 2013
:heart:
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moonfrogflying Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Love it!!!! :D
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MadPrinceFeanor Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Professional Writer
Beautifully executed. Your poetry has such a wonderful flow and your diction is always spot-on. I'm a little hung-up on the tense shift from the progressive present "polishing" back to simple present "and dream", but it certainly doesn't otherwise detract from the poem.

And yes, I'm in agreement with everyone that it's a breath of fresh air to see your work in my in-box again. :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D and aptly spun. :)
Nice to see you posting again.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks, my friend!
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:XD: Pretty good.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - that is very nice of you!
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome.
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RavenSpider Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
very good
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - that is very nice of you!
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RavenSpider Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're truly welcome you're a wonderful and very talented writer
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Bark Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Professional Writer
Great to see something in my inbox from you again!
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