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Your heart glistens
like a new fish,
caught against the rocks.
You once let me hold it
in my hands
and I trembled at its weight
and the way it beat
so fiercely under my fingers -
too many birds
holding up the sky.

You offered to make me
one of my own -
monstrous and simple,
out of silk and pins
to tuck under my coat
at funerals.

But the truth is,
I only like yours
because it reminds me
of October
and the clouds in your smile
every time it rains.
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Gossamerwings36 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Very nice, thanks for sharing.
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After-Eden Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Nice, nice
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PondDreamer Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful, all the elements combine wonderfully. :love:
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OpheliaWhispers Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist
My fav lines in this emotive work is:

"too many birds
holding up the sky."

I absolutely LOVE that particular part. I really like the way the poem gently cradles the reader in it's hands, then allows the reader to get dropped back in their seat lightly with the last verse. Great work... this one really takes you on a journey :D
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011
Would it be too simple a praise to say your work makes me happy? :)
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takenight Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011  Student Writer
Gorgeously worded, I adore the imagery. Well done!
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chryssalis Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011
:clap:
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bewilderedconfused Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
The master " word weaver" strikes again! :clap: :clap: :clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011  Professional Writer
That is very nice of you. many thanks.
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011  Student Writer
You should read "The House of Leaves" by Mark Z. Danielewski.
The poetic genius of it is utterly breathtaking.

Lovely piece as always. :heart:
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