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I watched your hands
dangle at loose ends
from your coat
like butchers,
the smell of low tide
clinging to your pants
in the shallow light,
and felt fear
fill the room again.
I knew your face
and what it meant
and how the world
could go blank
in the blink of an eye;
how dreams,
pigeon soft and slow,
got caught between your ribs
and beat down
like something caged.
I saw the window catch
your reflection,
your shadow
slowly criminal
between the curtains
as if fleeing,
wasting the landscape
with your gaping gait -
and wondered
if the trees could hold you
and why the cost of silence
was stronger
than my prayers.
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:iconangelofash:
I really like this one

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Float above the void- do not enter, but taste the sweet nothings on your tounge. There is poetry in despair and epitaphs in happiness where hatred dwells in love.
:iconponddreamer:
Something dark brews beneath the surface of this. Just enough fear and menace to give that impression. Love the imagery, brilliant piece.

--
Shamelessly proud mother of =Mr-Ie

"There are two tragedies in life.
One is not to get your hearts desire.
The other is to get it."

George Bernard Shaw
:iconleyghan:
I saw the window catch
your reflection,
your shadow
softly criminal
between the curtains
as if fleeing,
wasting the landscape
with your gaping gait -
and wondered
if the trees could hold you
and why the cost of silence
was stronger
than my prayers.


:worship:

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*
I’m dead. I’ve missed you. Kiss … ?
- Neil Gaiman


I am a member of #Writers-Club & #PlumeWorks
:iconevilpixie71:
In all of your writings, thus far, I've seen either bits and pieces of my self or can relate to the concept of the entire piece...and it is captivating. This brilliant work included! Thank you so much for sharing your words with us! :worship: :)

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"Snowflakes are one of nature's most fragile things, but just look what they can do when they stick together." - Vista M. Kelly
:iconmimilynch:
There is some sort of fear or menace beneath the surface on this one, but also some wistfulness. LOVE.

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Reaction chart of exclamation marks:
< 3: Can be solved with hot cocoa and mini-marshmallows
3-5: Break into angsty passion-filled duet, and Bob's your uncle
> 5: Gather the children and make a run for it ~Elegantos

Yes. I AM a Faramir fangirl.
:icontibialisant:
I love how you make me SEE it in your writing.

Thank you

--
O Come With Me to the Moonlit Pool
:icon0demonic-angel0:
Love it... I can't think of how to describe it... It's just...beautiful.

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Child of my enemy, why have you come? I offer no forgiveness for father's sins passed to his son.
- Gravemind, Halo 3

So what if you can see the darkest side of me? No one will ever change this animal I have become.
- Three Days Grace
:iconarcharad:
Form some reason I see the grim reaper reflected here But a more personal view of him.

Beautiful imagery as always Brendan. :aww:

--
Writing teaches us our mysteries ~ Marie De L'Incarnation

Prose critic for *Critique-It
:iconsilentplea:
Very moody piece :)

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~Shelley

What lies behind us
And what lies before us
Are small matters compared to
what lies within us

~Ralph Waldo Emerson~

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