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She weaves a dress upon the loom,
her neighbors knowing it's a shroud,
window dressing for a tomb -
she weaves a dress upon the loom.
Forbidden fruit has scarred the womb,
a stranger's face amidst the crowd,
she weaves a dress upon the loom -
her neighbors knowing it's a shroud.
For the DFC :iconkiwi-damnation:

This poem is a triolet.
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:iconmertus:
Mertus Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012
Very much a fan,
Triolets do not get as much love as they should
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! I do not do much fixed form poetry and I deeply admire those who do. It takes a lot of discipline and creativity!
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Mertus Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012
No problem and I agree fixed form does take an awful lot of work. Dorthy Parker has some very nice triolets in her anthologies though.
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KatieRoo Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A triolet! *goes on to google...*

Very well done - it gives you very much sense the of weaving..
And shroud happens to be one of my favourite words :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much.
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AuburnOleander Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
It makes me think of "The Lady of Shallott" and of "Strange Fruit". Not because of the content, but because of the shroud and loom and the fruit metaphor. The three pieces of work are very unrelated, but the keywords make me think of them.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it!
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AuburnOleander Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011
:-)
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CrimzonRose Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011   Writer
I love this Brendan. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I enjoyed writing this one.
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CrimzonRose Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011   Writer
You're welcome :D
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RakloRay Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Better than very good !
RR
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it! Happy Holidays.
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RakloRay Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011  Professional Writer
Season's Greetings !
RR
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Mayumisan Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
...I don't get it. Does she have to kill her baby? @.@
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WaywardGypsy Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
triolet tres bien!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it! Happy Holidays.
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WaywardGypsy Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome!
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, some good thought provoking power in this one. :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am actually pleased with this one.
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OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011  Student Writer
Excellent piece. It is like a dizzying spell really. So captivating.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it! Happy Holidays.
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OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Student Writer
No problem. And Happy Holidays to you as well.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
There's a sad story, greater than 8 lines can normally tell.
I very much like the style.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Completely my pleasure. :]
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011   Writer
Your writing makes my life worth living. :aww:

I really love this form. And your words work so beautifully with it!

Amazing work, as always. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Professional Writer
Many thanks! That is very appreciated!
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012   Writer
Sure thing. :aww:
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j0rosa Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
wonderful :love:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it! Happy Holidays.
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Student Writer
I like it!
it reminds me of the Lady of Shallot.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
A favorite of mine. many thanks!
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keyandheart Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Very intriguing, i like it
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it! Happy Holidays.
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keyandheart Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. Happy holidays to you too
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QuenWrites Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This reminds me of the story of Penelope weaving a shroud while Odysseus was away, saying she'll pay attention to her suitors once she's finished it, then unpicking it every night so she can remain faithful to Odysseus.

The scene in this poem is so easy to picture and it has a lovely sort of melancholy to it.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
I had forgotten about that story. Thanks!
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QuenWrites Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :)
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Gender-Unknown Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
Never heard of a triolet, but love this :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it! Happy Holidays.
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:icondecemberforge:
DecemberForge Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
Is this by any chance based off the Scarlet Letter?
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Oddly enough, I have never read it. I was not a fan of Hawthorne. It is also a bit darker than adultery.
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DecemberForge Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
The only reason I asked is because Hester was only ever allowed to make shrouds after she was branded with the A. A shame really because she was the finest seamstress in town. I hated reading Hawthorne in school. My class and teacher just killed it for me. But I recently reread it and came to really appreciate it. If nothing else, I had to admire his ability to stretch a sentence.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Professional Writer
I did not know that. The woman in my poem is weaving it for herself as she plans on taking her own life.

I might try reading him again now that I am older - I might appreciate him more.
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iliumleather Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
Very very cool
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! Something nice and dark...
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iliumleather Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
I like. great work
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alapip Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
not only a 'form',
but a well told story
multiplies the art.

yes!

:)pip
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I like this form. it's short!!
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