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Blackbirds

Blackbirds crying,
Beaks pierced with rue; wing tips broken
Blackbirds crying
Frail songs born on air and dying
And frail sounds no voice has spoken
Tiny beating hearts laid open
Blackbirds crying




Shiver

Shiver of hips
A twist of silk sends coins flying
Shiver of hips
the rhythm poised upon her lips
Dancer, her seven veils sighing
silk upon her bronze skin lying
Shiver of hips
December Form Challenge, 2012 :iconkiwi-damnation::iconprojectdfc:

December 11th: Rondelet
The rondelet is a french form consisting of two rhymes
contained in a seven line stanza. Line one is the exact same as
the 3rd and 7th lines. The structure is:
line 1 - 4 syllables - A (the same as line 3 and 7)
line 2 - 8 syllables - b
line 3 - 4 syllables - A
line 4 - 8 syllables - a
line 5 - 8 syllables - b
line 6 - 8 syllables - b
line 7 - 4 syllables - A

I wrote two.


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:icongentlemananachronism:
GentlemanAnachronism Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really beautiful work - two very different takes on the same form, and both brilliant technically and as pieces of description :D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I appreciate it!
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Really beautiful work. Captivating word use and excellent visualization. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Superbly written my dearest!:clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks. I appreciate it very much!
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:iconmordial33:
Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Fancy meeting you here! As I have already sad, I love this piece!
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks. I appreciate it very much!
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GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Didn't know about this type of poetry, seems interesting...

Loved the first one, immediately reminded me of a song called "Broken Bird" C:

Great work :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it!
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:icongeekgirl97:
GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome ^^
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GoddessSirena Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love them both, but Shiver reminds me of the chapter I am working on right now and just blows me away. Great job.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it!
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:icongoddesssirena:
GoddessSirena Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course :). Anytime.
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Professional Writer
invité ici /feat here : [link] :sun:
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Merci beaucoup!
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WaywardGypsy Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is SUPER picky and forgive me, but you should make allof the 'A's in your explanation capital letters... forgive me for being OCD. I love Blackbirds it is my favorite of the two!
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Writer
In this case, the capital A indicates the same word...small a is the rhyming word. And I did not write the explanation....
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:iconwaywardgypsy:
WaywardGypsy Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow... hmm I guess that makes sense
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:icondawn181:
dawn181 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the Shiver one. The imagery was wonderful.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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dawn181 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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Skullkid43 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
I really love the Blackbirds one:DAnd the rythm(Heh) of Shiver is very fun(?)can't really find the words to describe how great your work is!:)Amazeingly done!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
That is very nice of you to say - thanks!
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:iconskullkid43:
Skullkid43 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Your welcome:)
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:icon1nkl1ng:
1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
I especially like the dancer one. :)
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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:iconmrwootton:
MrWootton Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
I quite like Shiver.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks - I am glad.
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:iconsweediesart:
SweediesArt Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amazing!!!
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks, my friend!
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:iconsweediesart:
SweediesArt Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
my pleasure:heart::hug:
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:iconthedorsai:
TheDorsai Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As of this post, you are deviation 60 on the Popular: 8 hours category.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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:iconravenspider:
RavenSpider Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the blackbird poem. Very good.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I am glad you liked it.
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:iconravenspider:
RavenSpider Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your truly welcome
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:iconcygam-7:
Cygam-7 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Traditional Artist
I love the the combination of a blackbirds and a harem girl, wonderful visual :D
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! The first one was inspired by a crow with a broken wing in our yard. The second by a belly dancer I saw perform.
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
parfaitement maîtrisé - congrats :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Merci beaucoup!
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Seeing you work these forms has profoundly deepened my admiration for your skills Brendan.
You've managed to make your content absorbing and relevant. Bravo!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
That is very high praise. I consider you the master of trad, so your words mean a great deal to me. Many thanks.
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:iconmordial33:
Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful! Can I ask what inspired the blackbirds stanza? It is so hauting and beautiful!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
It was a crow with a broken wing in our front yard. Technically a crow is not a blackbird, but I took artistic liberty!
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