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He wasn't anything
she wanted in a man.
She found his mouth confusing
and the pierce of his gaze
unsettled her
and made her skin feel small.
He asked too many questions
with the brandish of his hips
and his tongue broke promise
with the stories mother told
about good girls and heaven.
She did not like the way
his eyes counted the buttons
on her shirt like angels
or the rude words
that raked against her dreams
and made perfect sense
or how the way he said her name
under his breath
made that place between her hips
go rough like August....
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:iconponddreamer:
Beautiful images, and the flow is like its title: Perfect. The counting buttons line is wonderful. You have quite a flair for the naughty. *grins*

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Shamelessly proud mother of =Mr-Ie

"There are two tragedies in life.
One is not to get your hearts desire.
The other is to get it."

George Bernard Shaw
:iconmalandante:
Perfect is right. Love the descriptive words they create the perfect atmosphere.

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The cold sensation of steel, upon my skin sends a shiver down my spine.
:iconcsnyder:
wonderfully expressed, flows like wine
:iconstayintwisted:
nice description of the "bad boy" girls seem to love so often

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hell girl I wouldn't keep offering to spend the rest of my life with you if I didn't value you a lot. :rose::rose::rose:
:icontenshikoneko:
sounds like my kind of guy ;)
:icondesinent-river:
Ewww... to the last 2 lines lol

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Smite those who wrong you and strike with a blade of vengence!
:icondenlm:
Outstanding! You've captured that first brush with animal attraction quite vividly; that point where innocence and desire clash. I loved every word, but was touched most strongly by the last stanzas: "...how the way he said her name
under his breath
made that place between her hips
go rough like August...."

I envy the strength of this poem.
:icontimlasure:
Very nicely told! :clap:

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What if there were no hypothetical questions?
:iconwhangel:
Amazing as always! I love the imagery this provokes. :)

--
Mythology is psychology misread as biography.-Joseph Campbell

Browse my :gallery: [link]
:iconsilentplea:
Great words that produced a clear image in my head.
I think I just got a vision of James Dean...:D

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~Shelley

What lies behind us
And what lies before us
Are small matters compared to
what lies within us

~Ralph Waldo Emerson~

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