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Night never ends here -
the thin blue line
a stranger packs in his bags
before losing his mind;
the scratch behind our eyes
that keeps us moving
down the highway.

It is a jail cell at three a.m.,
the warden playing cards,
whiskey wetting his dreams
where a spark lays waste
to a family left behind;
the backlight of a slum,
a thousand rooms of winter
and water leaking in a lightbulb
over your head.

It is midnight in a foxhole,
the strafe of friendly fire
like a flashlight to beat
the weary-wounded
into watching for a sign;
the last drink festering on formica
six inches of crushed tafetta
wearing out its welcome
on a barstool called home.

It is dawn in the mortuary
last night's pickings
carved up for christmas
special delivery to no one
who will care;
and the silent mourning bedlam
left thinking on the drainboard
carted out for the trashmen
to haul away
and sell.
NaPoWriMo 4/11/12
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:iconleeannekortus:
LeeAnneKortus Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Wow!! :wow:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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just1ofamillion Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Student Writer
The images you created in this poem are so gorgeous and each is unique but it still has that flavor of loneliness that ties them all together. The word choice and flow are great, but it's not so over the top that there isn't that little story, that humanity that I can recognize, in each of the stanzas. I think my favorite image is the "six inches of crushed taffeta/wearing out its welcome/on a barstool called home."
On a slightly more nitpicky note, apparently you spelled taffeta incorrectly. Not much of a big deal but just so you know :)
-Charlee
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! I did not even notice!
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cuincyboy Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Awesome. Well written
Congrats
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate that very much!
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drakora5588 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
Interesting...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks.
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drakora5588 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
:D
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QueenOfQuills Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Student Writer
Great imagery - has a great rhythmn as usual :D
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