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Surely you see
just how wrong this is?
Even the streetlamp agrees;
then again,
it saw the whole thing -
woman crumpled
in a stairwell,
only bricks for company.

Oh my hands found her
so ready and willing -
needy,
the fog of rapture
wreathing her head.

My knife
found her best parts
tucked in and plucked -
that treasure
from her belly -
and took it
home.

I made a god
of her,

left her smiling,
bleeding out

her fortune.
This is for the:iconglory-be-project: While you do not have to post every day, you have to at least write something, even if it is a couple of lines. Please consider participating!

The prompt "Guilty" is from the Mea Culpa contest at :iconvicious-verse: I am not entering (I am donating prizes and judging), but you should!!
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013   Writer
Wicked and delicious, Brendan. It would have been a very strong entry. But I'm glad to have you as a judge!
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ClockerZero Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
There is a sadistic elegance to the nature of your piece. I hear a tone that entertains my inner demon. I don't want to hear it, yet I beg for more.

I feel "guilty" for enjoying your piece as much as I did.
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SabedoriaAmetista Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
Excellent!!! ...And a little scary...
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Chilling and dark and doesn't shy away from it one bit. Excellent.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it.
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:iconxeena-dragonkizz:
xeena-dragonkizz Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Very scary....brrrr
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it.
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tiajones Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
very chilling.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am very glad you like it.
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:iconshades-of-lethe:
Shades-Of-Lethe Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very intriguing and provocative... Intense and wonderfully written!
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am glad you like it.
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:iconcaddman:
caddman Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Professional General Artist
...Fantastic work!...:)
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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:iconcaddman:
caddman Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional General Artist
...your welcome my friend...:)
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donantoine Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
I would almost think someone has been reading/watching too much Jack the Ripper and it inspired this. Very nice either way.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Nah...Dexter per usual.
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:icondonantoine:
donantoine Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Same concept, different era. Hah!
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Professional Writer
True words, my friend. We all have an inner killer...
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:iconmoonstoneface:
moonstoneface Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Yay Latin! Depressing poem, which is well written, but Yay Latin!!! :P
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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moonstoneface Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
No problem! ^-^
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Kangaroodle Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Umm.... whoa. With a title like that, I thought you would be a whiny teenager type, with the whole "I'M SORRY I'M DIFFERENT WAT DO U WANT FRM ME" thing, who had happened by some Latin. not to say that that particular subject matter is trite or dumb, but people who write on that subject matter tend to use trite and dumb language/technique.

Instead, it is a very well-written, compelling piece of work. It was a twist ending that, upon my re-reading, shouldn't have been a surprise to me. But it was!
I suck at writing comments. I apologize!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Professional Writer
Believe me when I say it has been a couple of decades since I saw my teenage years! Thanks.
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:iconoviedomedina:
oviedomedina Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Well, this was unexpected.
Very "serial-killeresque"
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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:iconwordweight:
WordWeight Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Writer
Wasn't expecting this with that title :O
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
What were you expecting?
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:iconwordweight:
WordWeight Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student Writer
Something like an apology to someone. Latin translation of the phrase, you know? Like what you did though :D
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PaperDreamerArt Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist
Very visual...I pictured Jack the Ripper.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
I can definitely see that!
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:iconkizukudawn:
KizukuDawn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
It made me think of Jack the Ripper too, very dark and awesome...like the From Hell comics, by Allen Moore...reminiscent of his writing to me, it feels, which I like very much indeed. : 3
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PaperDreamerArt Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist
It's good to know that we agreed on that; the poem seemed to give off that kind of flavor. I've never read anything by Allen Moore, but I always enjoy reading Scarlettletters poetry and prose.
Thanks for the reply. :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And yes , life has it's dark sides.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
As does its inhabitants...
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sadly, true.
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alapip Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh. :O straight from "Criminal Minds",
Wednesday nights on CBS, Brendan.

makes me wonder, how many of our
300 million are criminally insane. are
they increasing/decreasing?

pip
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
I think most killers (murderers) are at least temporarily insane.
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alapip Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that, Brendan, begs a long discussion,
there being, i think, so many levels
and durations of insanity within the
realms of psychopath-sociopath-ology.

and past exposures to lead now-they-say.
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Skullkid43 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Haunting.....Its almost like watching the whole scene play out in front of you.Fantasticly done!:clap::D
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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:iconskullkid43:
Skullkid43 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
No problem.:D
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:iconjuunilee:
JuuniLee Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
It's the rawness that I like.
It speaks to the inner demon within us all...

"Beautifully Brutal"
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I am glad you like it.
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:iconhippiehebe:
HippieHebe Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh er. Don't usually see this perspective - dark and beautiful.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks. It was rather fun to write.
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:iconmichaelataraxia:
MichaelAtaraxia Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow. Very well-written, you can sort of feel what is happening. Certainly provokes a strong response.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I am glad you like it.
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MichaelAtaraxia Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome!
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EyeOfTheTygr Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
It's so...chilling. I love it
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