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Let me kiss those lips
so good at stirring up dissent
among the rabble
and keeping dull clerics
on their toes
with nimble questions
that try my patience
and drive strong men to drink,
like how many angels can sit on a pin head
or how do you shove a fat guy
through the eye of a needle?

Turn my water into wine
and stun the crowd
with your miracle of choice.
Maybe the Lazarus trick
where you cheat death
and then appear on a grilled cheese sandwich
to housewives in Hoboken -
one last shell game
from the carpenter who would be king
and start a revolution.

You see, I have a plane to catch
(30 pieces of silver won't get ya far these days)
A one way ticket to the promised land;
but before I go, I need to know

Are we good?
The relationship between Judas and Jesus has always fascinated me. This is from Judas' perspective.
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2010
fascinating
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks. A sort of modern spin on an old story...
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
indeed
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lion-feathers Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010  Student Writer
I like the ending. But it leaves me very unclear about how Judas feels toward Jesus. He sounds to like him at first, then starts to seem annoyed. Were you going for ambivalence?
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2010  Professional Writer
Most of my work is very ambivalent...and that is not intentional, although i do prefer the reader to take what he wants from my work. In this piece i was updating the story a bit (ala JC Superstar)and envisioned judas as a wise ass...
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
I like your approach, Brendan. How could they not be accomplices?
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2010  Professional Writer
I was definitely going for a very contemporary feel here...I am pleased you like it.
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LeeAnneKortus Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Wonderful. I love how tongue-in-cheek it is, even though dealing with the heavy tensions of that relationship!
great work, Brendan! :clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I appreciate it. I was going for a more contemporary feeling with this one...
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Gypsie-inBleu Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010   Writer
I really like your take on the story, and the way you constructed this poem. 'Tis a very fascinating subject indeed.

This also reminds me somewhat of Corpus Christi - I don't know if you've ever read/seen the play or not, but it's a very beautiful portrayal of the Christ/apostles relationship.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks. It was basically influenced by "Jesus Christ Superstar"...and came out of nowhere while driving. I am not familiar with the play...thanks for the tip.
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Gypsie-inBleu Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010   Writer
You're welcome. :peace:
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Ferelwing Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Very fascinating.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I appreciate it.
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Ferelwing Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
:huggle: You're welcome hon!
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Neji-roo42 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap: bravo!!!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks - i am glad you like it.
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hakeberhut Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010
Wow, this is awesome. I love the mix of ancient allusions and modern touches, and the ending was just ambiguous enough to work.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks - that was what I wanted to do. And the ending just sort of happened.
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010
fasinating
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks. I wanted something a bit contemporary s far as a twist...and i am always amused by those sitings of Jesus on sandwiches.
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
well done indeed on the twist 1_~
And agreed with the Sittnigs of Jesus on sandwhiches. Lol.
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Poisonedkitty Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010
Very interesting... Something to think about.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Kind of a modern update of the story...
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seussical-love Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010
Honestly, I don't think we're ever going to know the really true story of what happened... which I think I might be okay with, because it makes for good writing fodder. (:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Exactly! If we did, it would ruin future poetry and prose...not to mention films.
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ArchArad Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010
Lovely tone to this poem told from Judas' side. :clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks! And a bit updated at that!
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Ganymede314 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010   Writer
You're such an amazing poet. It really is ridiculous how good you are. As someone who is currently struggling with their poetry, I can really appreciate just how hard it is to produce something of this quality. Brilliant. :clap:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Thank-you so very much. I rather like this one, actually. It just sort of all spilled out...
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demon-polecat Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010
Oh wow, I love it.

My own thoughts on Judas are that he had the hardest job, and, if the Gospels are all true, then he was punished the most for doing what was expected of him. If he hadn't betrayed Jesus, someone else would have had to. I think Jesus knew that, and didn't think badly of him because of it.

I like to think that, much like Pontius Pilate in The Master and Margarita, Judas and Jesus go for walks up the moonlight and chat like old friends.

Seriously though, your ending is superb.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks. And I agree with you. The relationship is fascinating...
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Valedhelven Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
Love it! :nod: What a great perspective, Brendan!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks. I wanted to take a sort of street hip view...
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ScaredAmbitious Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
"or how do you shove a fat guy
through the eye of a needle?"

This is gold. The modern approach is funny but gives it an underlying realism that's very effective. :+fav: :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Many thanks. I wanted to give the story an update approach.
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LeaWiggins Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
It is nice to know that I am not the only one who had a fascination about this relationship. My spiritual beliefs have undergone many changes since then, however I always looked at it from this point. Most people think that Judas was the heavy. Notice how no one names their boy children Judas?

Does anyone stop to think that without the act he performed, there would not have been a savior for the Christian believers?

I always believed he was an instrument of God. Someone had to be the one to betray him.

A very interesting poem, and a unique point of view as well.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks. i wanted a contemporary feel to it, thus the voice. I cannot remember the movie title, but it was about the life of Christ and had an interesting spin on Judas. It portrayed Judas as betraying him in an effort to get the masses up in arms against the Romans and come to Christ's defense...and it backfired.
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LeaWiggins Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
Yes, and I remember that actually there are people who believe that is what happened, (outside of the movie, I mean).
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
i am so hungryyy and reading the one grilled cheese sandwich line reallyyyy makes me want food haha

but besides that, this is very interesting.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Writer
*Laughs* Okaaaaaaaaaaaay...
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UltimateOutlaw Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010
Apparently everyone is all about the faintly sacreligious poetry this evening...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Writer
*Chuckles* I always pictured Judas as a bit of a wise ass....
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009
fascinating.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks. The relationship between the two has always intrigued me...
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Flesh-unfolding Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2009
I've always found Judas his character and the relationship between him and Jezus very fascinating. You portayed them in a less classic way I expected you would have. But it suits them very well, and the ending is quite strong.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks. This one all came at once while driving.... The relationship has always fascinated me as well. I wanted to give it a contemporary feel...
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SordisPretiosa Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009
Huh...? I must have overlooked this one - otherwise I'd hade faved it earlier!
I was searching around the "Judas" deviations and suddenly: "What? One from Scarlettletters? ôO".

So it's a late fav... ^^'

I especially like the last line. "Are we good?" That's impressive and intensive. Very well done.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks! This is one of my favorites, actually. Glad you like it!
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Unknown-Silhouette Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2009   Writer
I, like so many others, began my life with Religion in mind, it got lost somewhere along the way, albeit if you had asked me years back if I would ever lose it, I would have argued blindly that no such thing would ever happen... alas how people change.

The relationship between the two has always fascinated me, and regardless of whether he betrayed Christ, or aided him, in my beleifs, he served a purpose in his life, as we all do, even if that was for the worse.

The last line made me laugh for the blase attitude you gave Judas, as well as the fact those three little words made him seem more human than history portrays him, but also it made me sad for the betrayal of one friend to another, those things, coupled with its double meaning; hit hard. Such a profound way to end an excellent piece of writing.

Moments like this are when literature strikes me the hardest, when 3 simple little words, used correctly, can make a person feel such ambivalence, kudos to you.
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