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Fear is a mongrel child -
its slave coils
snake tight in your belly,
poised to strike hot,
and too dense and bright
to leave a scar
beyond the brush of shadows.

It aches;
and cuts in clean ribbons
and stops the easy innocence
that lurks like a child
in the corner of your eye.

It burns;
and sits on your tongue
in acrid syllables
that scorch the dreams
off  soft white bones
and strips your soul clean
of artificial life.

It finds its prey
in hollow sounds -
the skipped beat of frail hearts
and the faint protests
of random doubts
that haunt your world
in cold inches...
....
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AlisonBlue Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Student Writer
searing/visceral work
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I truly appreciate it.
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liluthofthevalley Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I have already lived through most of my worst fears. Most, that is.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009  Professional Writer
I still have a few rearing their ugly heads...
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2009
You've portrayed fear ideally if it were a tangible being. Though it does seem to be very much so at times. I believe many will attest to that, aye. Very well done.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks so much. Fear is very destructive...at times it really seems like a live thing.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2009
A well crafted poem, skilfully organised. Your demon is arfully created. I particularly liked:

It burns;
and sits on your tongue
in acrid syllables
that scorch the dreams
off soft white bones
and strips your soul clean
of artificial life.

That sort of defensive rage is well captured.

(in line six, shouldn't the verb agreement require "strip"?)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks. I am best friends with my demons...

Hmmm...not sure. I think the subject here is "it"...
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009
Sorry, I've polished my glasses since that comment. I can probably see things a little clearer now.
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AndromedaII Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2009
:heart: You wonderful (masterpiece) work has been featured here >>> [link] :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!!
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AndromedaII Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009
It's an honor, Brendan. :)
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moon-sorceress Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2009
Wow does this poem ever speak true....
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2009  Professional Writer
Fear can overwhelm us if we let it....
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black-stray-wolf Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
*chills* down my spine, dang! *shudders*
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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PaperDreamerArt Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009  Hobbyist
Excellent poetic description!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am glad you like it...and apologize for being so long in replying.
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PaperDreamerArt Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009  Hobbyist
You're welcome :)
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009   Writer
the second stanza is my favorite
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks, my friend.
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Mymorbidfairytale Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
wow.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks! fear can be crippling at times.
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Mymorbidfairytale Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
yes it can
you capture that well
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SweetBlackRose13 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, gosh.
:heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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ToffuMuffin Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009  Student Writer
so inspiring!!! :D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks!
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ToffuMuffin Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2009  Student Writer
yup! :D
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Vampmaniac Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009
I like the way you brought fear to life with the metaphor of the mongrel child.

Another intense emotional read. I can defnitely relate to this one.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks, fear can be devastating at times....
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Annapurani Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009
WOW.

right-on.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks!
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alapip Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
fear may be all that;

but, it does its most harm
in right wing politics,
bringing wars,
untreated maladies,
ruined lives
of whole families,
excessive punishment,
justified lies.

though, it's not real,
only there to manipulate,
to appeal to your zeal,
to create your hate.

the fear you describe, Brendan,
can do just the opposite, from the
fight of flight response, some
amazing feats of bravery are
initiated. valor, rather than the
opposite, can be caused.

good read, lots of thoughts from it.

pip
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Professional Writer
Paranoia and propaganda create a terror that is destructive in the extreme. And yes, some fears can create heroes! My apologies for being so long in replying!
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palleor Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009
Fear truly is a demon whose desire is to control. You have touched on an issue that has been all too real in my life. Very well written!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. We all have some very fierce inner demons. My apologies for being so long in replying!
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palleor Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009
You are so very welcome! Hope you had a great vacation!
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Morphine-Cloud Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009
Very strong....
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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Morphine-Cloud Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2009
;p
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AndromedaII Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2009
Congrats Brendan...I saw you in Daily Literature Deviations today...great.:clap: Wonderful. [link] You probably know about this already, but...:heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks so much! I was very honored to receive that!
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AndromedaII Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2009
You're so welcome, and you definitely deserved it! And more. :)
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ejectionletter Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
(: = The skipped beat of frail hearts
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2009  Professional Writer
*Smiles* Many thanks! I am glad you like the image.
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2009
You wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations). It is featured in a news article here: [link] and in our journal here: [link]

Keep writing and keep creating.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2009  Professional Writer
Wow!! Thanks so much for this - I am honored!
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009
It was our pleasure
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paintedbluerose Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2009  Student Writer
This gave me chills. Very nice, chilling piece. I hardly find any good "scarier" poems now a days.
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