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The light makes cheats
of us both,
so we change clothes
in the greedy dark
without looking
or thinking twice.
We do not touch,
our skin afraid to lose
or breathe too close.

We pass in the street
but do not acknowledge
each other
in buildings'reflections,
in the glare of taxi cabs
or the stiff pull of elevators.
We do not rub elbows
or let our shoulder blades
press together.

But I would know you
anywhere - any place
the sun is uneasy
and the skin of us
wears thin
or strangers are told
to breathe
in another direction.
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MaskedWannabee Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Something is bothering me with the tempo here, I am unsure what though, (even after re-reading it 3 times), also, try to work with commas and dots.
But other than that, it's great. :)
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. Absolutely so. 
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Professional Writer
I appreciate that - many thanks!
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Drusila333 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
I really like this part "We do not touch, our skin afraid to lose or breathe too close." It makes me think of what we don't do because of fear! Beautiful work luv! :blackrose:
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Mikaellakun Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013   Digital Artist
Nice nice ~
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MrWootton Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Professional Writer
Nice.

(there's a space missing in line 4, 2nd stanza)
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Magnificent!:worship:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it. Many thanks, love.
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My Magician of words,I love you and your poetry!:iconbigheartplz:
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bluemysticart Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
:hug: :heart:
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