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The light makes cheats
of us both,
so we change clothes
in the greedy dark
without looking
or thinking twice.
We do not touch,
our skin afraid to lose
or breathe too close.

We pass in the street
but do not acknowledge
each other
in buildings'reflections,
in the glare of taxi cabs
or the stiff pull of elevators.
We do not rub elbows
or let our shoulder blades
press together.

But I would know you
anywhere - any place
the sun is uneasy
and the skin of us
wears thin
or strangers are told
to breathe
in another direction.
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MaskedWannabee Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Something is bothering me with the tempo here, I am unsure what though, (even after re-reading it 3 times), also, try to work with commas and dots.
But other than that, it's great. :)
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. Absolutely so. 
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Professional Writer
I appreciate that - many thanks!
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Drusila333 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
I really like this part "We do not touch, our skin afraid to lose or breathe too close." It makes me think of what we don't do because of fear! Beautiful work luv! :blackrose:
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Mikaellakun Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013   Digital Artist
Nice nice ~
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MrWootton Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Professional Writer
Nice.

(there's a space missing in line 4, 2nd stanza)
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Magnificent!:worship:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it. Many thanks, love.
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My Magician of words,I love you and your poetry!:iconbigheartplz:
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bluemysticart Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
:hug: :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks so much!
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Benjamin-Biddix Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice flow. :thumbsup:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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flummo Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Student Writer
Good to have you on here again, this is lovely as always. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks. I am glad to be back again.
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neenjaah Featured By Owner May 19, 2013
This is beautiful. And I'm glad to see you back(:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
That is very nice of you - thanks very much.
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Tomea Featured By Owner May 19, 2013   Writer
I love that line that your wrote
'Strangers are told to breath in another direction'
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it - thanks!
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maskedinsight Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
so glad you are back!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks - I am glad to be back.
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Cinnamoncandy Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You have been featured. [link] :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Many thanks!!
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NeverTheWanted Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well said.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
nice to see you back! missed your work
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks so much. I am glad to be writing again!
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hooray!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Fine work, yet again. Good to see ya back, Brendan. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am glad to be back - thanks.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart::hug:
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Insomniatic-poet Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
or strangers are told
to breathe
in another direction.

GREAT line
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I am glad you like it.
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Frumpelstiltskin Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
The tension...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
That is very nice of you - many thanks!
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camillejilliane Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks so much!
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Iam-Dreamfire Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wicked
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PaperDreamerArt Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist
Well done!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Mnay thanks!
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PaperDreamerArt Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist
My pleasure! :heart:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Such a joy to see a post from you, Brendan.. :rose:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much for those warm words!
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And thank you for your warm reply (:
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caddman Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Professional General Artist
...Sweet comp and awesome work...:)

welcome back Bro...:highfive:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much, my friend.
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caddman Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
...:iconmypleasuresignplz: my friend...:ahoy:
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love-shakspeare Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love it. I'm so glad you're back :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks - it is nice to be back!
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aieren Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice to have you back! I missed your postings.
And what an amazing piece to return with; it is so well composed, and the story is intriguing. I absolutely love it :heart:
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