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Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Mature Romance > Open


She let him get lost
in the soft blue noise
that crowded behind her eyes
and the promises
that bloomed like orange lilies
on a day
gone mad with heat.
She knew the danger
of her skin
where his thumbs
caught under her collar
and she felt the future
swell her ribcage
rustling the calm
and pushing the sky
beyond her limits.
But she didn't care,
she just wanted to taste
what he could offer
in the crush of his arms
where his muscles ran clean
and hard
and snapped her lazy dreams
to attention,
stretching desire out
under the shade
of his lean dark.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
*thetaoofchaos Jul 15, 2009, 6:32:31 AM
for Victoria, indeed.

"she felt the future
swell her ribcage"

tremendous passion.

--
The world is an eraser for these words


- Jack Kerouac


we must destroy that which contains us
:icongirlofgreys:
~GirlOfGreys Jul 15, 2009, 6:32:52 AM
Amazing! :heart:

"she just wanted to taste what he could offer"

i adore this line

--
~Love is like a photograph...they both develop in darkness.~
:iconsora-seraph:
~Sora-Seraph Jul 15, 2009, 6:47:48 AM
Luscious. The imagery of cool blue and orange is striking in the first few lines, and later on I feel like the sky is expanding and I can rise higher higher higher. Dazzling, all in all.

--

If the Eskimos have 100 words for love, high school students bent on your destruction have at least that many for “asshole.”
- Libba Bray

:iconsuzume2:
~suzume2 Jul 15, 2009, 7:06:29 AM
wow, very passinate

"she just wanted to taste what he could offer"

my favourite line, very well done

--
when there's a will, there's always a way and nothing is impossible.
:iconlicoricefactory:
~licoricefactory Jul 15, 2009, 7:20:36 AM
stretching desire out
under the shade
of his lean dark

lovely

--
Just for the record, the weather today is calm and sunny, but the air is full of bullshit.
:iconalapip:
*alapip Jul 15, 2009, 7:42:45 AM
Brendan; Victoria;
what a story they tell.

this should be as real
as the passion they feel.

pip

--
when a man refers to the woman
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:iconladyundone:
=LadyUndone Jul 15, 2009, 8:42:56 AM
'and snapped her lazy dreams
to attention'
:love:

--
"Blessed the hearts which can bend, for those shall never be broken."
Albert Camus
:iconspectrumchaser:
*Spectrumchaser Jul 15, 2009, 8:55:32 AM
makes me sigh with longing...:faint:

Such beautiful imagery and passion. I want to be Victoria for a day. :giggle:

--
Hey --- that's MY box of crayons!!
*Writers-Club
:iconponddreamer:
Mood: Love *PondDreamer Jul 15, 2009, 10:13:39 AM
From the opening line it is totally sublime. Fantastic piece, Brendan.

--
Shamelessly proud mother of =Mr-Ie

"There are two tragedies in life.
One is not to get your hearts desire.
The other is to get it."

George Bernard Shaw
:iconlicrydis:
~licrydis Jul 15, 2009, 10:37:35 AM
Beutiful a imaginative, I love how you put emotions and passion into the words :heart:

--
My cake is not a lie.
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