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Let me be your martyr tonight
or your smoking gun
(you know you love it
when I pretend to be vulnerable)
Just wear me
and make me see your light
and don't take me
at face value
or let me over-think you.

Don't mince words
just take me prisoner
and let your lips do
what they do best,
something cataclysmic
with your hands
looped under my belt
and sliding down my hips
to that point
where I don't return.

Drop a bomb or two
let's see what you can detonate
and turn upside down
in this dirty little town
and just pray
the neighbors do not report us again,
because the last time
you burned this down

we didn't come up for air...
For Victoria
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this, it is fabulous
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014  Professional Writer
I am glad you like it. Thanks!
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student Writer
I approve of this poem. :thumbsup:

But truly, very beautiful.
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bitter-sweet-endings Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011  Student Writer
Love the imagery! Good job!
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scarletwave Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
"don't take me
at face value
or let me over-think you"

still love your writing, still envy your drive...
this is great
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
(you know you love it
when I pretend to be vulnerable)

brilliant.
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KRaven42 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful as always. I see this one's updated from its original submission in 2009. But I hadn't seen it before, so I'm just going to favorite it now and tell you it's amazing. :]
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Steamy. XD

Awesome work. I absolutely love the rhythm and tone of this.
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CharmanteSourcie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
So how long did she take to yank your clothes off after you gave this to her?
I like the phrase: you know you love it
when I pretend to be vulnerable Hidden in parentheses like it's a whispered 'dirty secret'.

So much better than hey baby.
Though sometimes a wink is all you need.
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Poisonedkitty Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
Very nice, very nice.
...Words fail me at the time, but I like this. Applause.
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mseal Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
:faint:
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mj-magic Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
nice! ;P
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NotAlabaster Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
It is so difficult to comment on your work becaus it is too beautiful to critique and "wow" doesn't seem to quite say what I'm thinking. Very impressive as usual. Congratulations.
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escapejunkie Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
Captivating and lovely!
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RainySkyz Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011   Writer
:love: :heart:
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storyofmylife054 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
wow... excuse me while i go take a cold shower, damn Brendan, this is just incredible
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panKakes91 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2010
aahhhh! amazing! :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2010  Professional Writer
Many thanks. i appreciate it.
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LadyUndone Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:wave:
you've been featured in my journal
[link]
hope you don't mind
:heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
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RainbowEyedGypsy Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2009
love it! and love it even more when I see you posted in on my birthday!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2009  Professional Writer
A happy belated birthday - I hope it was good! Mine is 10/29...next week.
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RainbowEyedGypsy Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
Have a happy birthday!
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2009
how erotic ^^
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks! For whatever reason it did not strike me as that erotic...it is present, certainly...but I thought it was really subtle.
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vampireknightfan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Student Writer
Now, seeing as it is a very very hot Spring day in Australia, I think I might need the air-con turned down to the lowest it can go...damn! I wrote that down!

Gorgeous and very very erotic.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks, love. I am glad you like it!
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vampireknightfan Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2009  Student Writer
It was simply gorgeous!
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tiannangel Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009  Student General Artist
Thats gorgeous. :D
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Blood-Banker-J Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2009
Is it me or is it getting hot? lol =p

Anyways very creative... I love it.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Professional Writer
*Smiles* I am glad you like it.
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EternalSolaceEssence Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ah, i've been away too long. i've missed reading your beautiful works!! wonderful !! :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Professional Writer
Thank-you so very much. That means a lot to me.
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EternalSolaceEssence Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you are so very welcome.
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SparrowsFlame Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:drool: Amazing. I'm speechless. And breathless. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009  Professional Writer
Thank-you very much for those words.
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SparrowsFlame Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
You're most welcome! :)
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licoricefactory Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009
WOW. Smexy. Very seductive and beautiful.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
I am very glad you like it!
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the-f00l Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
ha ha great poem :) keep it up
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
Glad you like it!
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hamletspants Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
Love it! Not sure you need the bomb line, nor the one that follows it. The rest, though, is pure, ecstatic romance.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
Eh, endings are the bane of my existence. Many thanks, my friend.
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hamletspants Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009
Mine too - and a very deserving welcome.
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M-I-R-I-E-L Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
Damn, Brendan - it's a miracle that you don't melt the dA servers by uploading your work.

And you already know what you do to the women...
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
*Laughs* I am working on it... Many thanks.
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PoeticPinkie Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
OMG...I cannot believe how good this is...WOW
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
I am very glad you like it - thanks!
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PaperDreamerArt Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009   Digital Artist
Steamy!

The neighbors are just jealous! :D
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks! And i think you are right!!
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