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Won't you bleed for me
just a little bit
and show some skin
and moxie -
that fight hanging off
your jaw or
one of those new blue tattoos
that only I can see
because I love
what you try and hide
from all the boys.
You make me see death
in a whole new light
and I can get used to
this feeling
of sinking into you.
Besides,
I love how you want to dance at funerals
or maybe it's just that black
hangs like sin
off your shoulders
and you sound like a choir,
breaking tradition and all those
little taboos
you drink from my cup

when my mourning
grows eclectic .
For Victoria
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:iconladycrimson:
LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
"moxie" - how very post-noir of you :love:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2010  Professional Writer
*Laughs* I am still not sure about having used that word...
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C0nfessi0ns Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010
featured [link] :aww:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks very much. I appreciate it!
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ariel44 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010  Professional Writer
:iconthankyou1plz::iconthankyou2plz::iconthankyou3plz::iconthankyou4plz::iconthankyou5plz:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010  Professional Writer
:iconthankyou1plz::iconthankyou2plz::iconthankyou3plz::iconthankyou4plz::iconthankyou5plz:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Very Welcome *^_^*
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ShadowxXxLightning Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
Beautiful :+favlove:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks so much.
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ShadowxXxLightning Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2010
You're Welcome :aww:
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naminexkeroppi Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written!
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it!
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SlowFretboardDancer Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2009
very colourful.
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks! I appreciate it!
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Annapurani Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009
wow.

:heart:
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009  Professional Writer
Thank-you very much!
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:iconferelwing:
Ferelwing Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
Wonderfully expressive!
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks! I am still not happy with it...
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Ferelwing Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
:huggle: You're very welcome! I know that feeling, I get that way sometimes too.
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Drusila333 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009
Brings a new vision to death indeed ;)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Professional Writer
*Smiles* I always need a new perspective. Thanks, love.
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EternalSolaceEssence Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'M IN LOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HEART HEART HEART!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :) :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Professional Writer
That is incredibly nice of you - many thanks.
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EternalSolaceEssence Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you are welcome.
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BlueEyesCryNoMore Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2009  Student
really wonderfully raw. sarcastic but affectionate.

:rose:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Professional Writer
*Smiles* sort of my approach to life... Thanks.
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licoricefactory Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2009
wow. so dark for something so romantic. it was beautiful.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it.
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2009  Student Writer
Love the line "I love how you want to dance at funerals
or maybe it's just that black
hangs like sin
off your shoulders"
Bitter-sweet, gothic feel to it. I know what my "self" makes of the line, but I can't seem to describe in words how I feel about it.

Only that it's beautiful and wise.

Well done. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Professional Writer
That is a very nice compliment. Actually, I am not sure how it makes me feel either....
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SordisPretiosa Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009
"because I love
what you try and hide
from all the boys."

:heart:

Aaah, I like this so, so much.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks so very much!
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
whoa... there are so many nice phrases in there.

new blue tattoos
that only I can see (love the rhyme)

I love how you want to dance at funerals

black
hangs like sin

this poem has such a nice mood. sorta eclectic morbidity.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
The rhyme just dawned on me...*Laughs* Many thanks. I appreciate it.
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black-stray-wolf Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
...I love how you want to dance at funerals
or maybe it's just that black
hangs like sin
off your shoulders...

:heart: You know how to make an image of words seem as though it appears right before you. Beautiful as always.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
I truly appreciate that...it is what I strive to do.
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Gossamerwings36 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Really very nice !
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks, love.
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KilCillian Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Professional General Artist
"one of those new blue tattoos
that only I can see
because I love"

fucking brilliant
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! I am glad you like it.
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leyghan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
Many thanks.
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UltimateOutlaw Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
When my mourning grows eclectic..... What a pro ending!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
Thanks. It is a play on Mourning Becomes Electra...
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I love your dark style in this superb work dear Brendan!...descriptive and perfect delineated!...Superb!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Professional Writer
Yeah...I am all about the dark lately. You know why... Many thanks.
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Villenueve Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
~Hugs you~ Yes, I know my friend,but even when you write in dark style,you do masterpieces and well,your talent does not know boundaries!
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scarletwave Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
You know, your writing reminds me only sometimes (yours is better actually) of Anne Sexton, who was phenomenal. Wide open and unafraid to be.
Glorious traits, really.

This leaves me without the proper comments...

:clap:
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