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It was an old ache -
a rough reminder
she was not perfect,
a notch in his backbone
that creased his shirt
when he moved the wrong way.
There was a certain charm
about her face
and he liked how she could climb
when she had to
and how her spine lined up
perfectly
with his bookcase.
(But he wondered why
her jokes
bled into his flaws)
Still, he had to admit
she could
lean across a table
with a grace
that bordered on
godliness
and he could learn to believe
coincidence was

just a dying art.
NaPoWriMo 4/26/12
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:iconmrwootton:
MrWootton Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Professional Writer
I didn't like it until the last few lines... and now I do.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Professional Writer
It is a bit scattered. Thanks.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, that's stunning. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! It hit me as a bit disjointed at first, but I left it alone!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's probably just you that thinks that.
You seem pretty particular with your work. :)

You're very welcome!
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Achello Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
so visually perfect! your words always create the most vivid, memorable images for me. i love your use and selection of words.
they touch and stir a place inside that has gone damp and cold....my love for words and poetry.

truly, sheer poetry! Forgive me for faving it all. I just have too!

:worship:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Professional Writer
That is incredibly nice of you - thanks so much!
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:iconjimfleming:
jimfleming Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
Mysterious with a hint of erotica... Me like...
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! I somehow manage to get that hint in quite a bit!
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:iconjimfleming:
jimfleming Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
Ha! :)
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KizukuDawn Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
The final words in the piece really catch in my mind, as always, your great knack for description and poetic verse is impressive to me. :3
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I am glad you like it.
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KizukuDawn Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
'welcome, as always. ;3
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:iconmortuelle:
Mortuelle Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012
i think i haven't read coincidence in a more fitting context that this one. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I am glad you like it.
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jade-rose-art Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Good work
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I am glad you like it.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
old aches :heart:
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Indeed!
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RachiePiPie Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
We're certainly flawed beings aren't we? It's a lovely thing to remind people how divine that is. At least, that's what this did for me. Nice work.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it very much.
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j0rosa Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
:love:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! I appreciate that and am glad you liked it.
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KairiaShade Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Very good. I liked it.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! I appreciate that and am glad you liked it.
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Nina-Lipkin-Art Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
fantasticly written and though up :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! I appreciate that and am glad you liked it.
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Nina-Lipkin-Art Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
welcome :heart:
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EricaMarie15 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012
this is really unique, i like it :)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! I appreciate that and am glad you liked it.
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Between-Borderlines Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012
It really is remarkable. Your writings are powerful in such a unique way. To read it just once or twice would be insulting.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it very much.
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TennisWriter456 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012
This is gorgeous. It's simple, not too fancy or complex, but that's what gives it the marvelous, beautiful quality that it has. Amazing job.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much! I appreciate that and am glad you liked it.
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TheMagicianLord Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Student Writer
(But he wondered why
her jokes
bled into his flaws)

for me, that line really gave purpose to the poem, instead of just being the typical love story, despite your amazing writing.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it very much.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Student Writer
"Still, he had to admit
she could
lean across a table
with a grace
that bordered on
godliness
and he could learn to believe
coincidence was

just a dying art."

These lines really sealed it for me.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Many thanks - I appreciate it very much.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012
I don't know what it means, but I like it.

My Analysis Machine and Intuition Machine are both on vacation, but the Difference Engine still functions.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Professional Writer
It's a bit abstract. Basically a guy realizing that the girl was far from perfect, but he misses her.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 5, 2012
Thanks for the explication, Brendan. :)
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
HA!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
:D
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:iconjimfleming:
jimfleming Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
You're funny, Mr. Moonflower :)
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
Thanks, Jim.
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:iconjimfleming:
jimfleming Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
Humor is right up there with oxygen in the
"necessary to survive" list...Just read this:[link]
I think C. H. has a direct connection with
the cosmos on an atomic level..Brilliant journalist
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
He's got it backwards, the insanity is the cause of the culture's end, not its result.
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
We can agree do disagree...:)
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DeadSkarlett Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012
:)
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks very much - I am glad you like it.
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